valley of the ashes

go on an’
eat your cake

on your pretty little
plate

cross your fingers
at your ankles

beautiful fools
get the best of everthin’

hid under skins of
careless lovers

did your momma teach you that,
when she taught you how to pray ?

did your daddy praise you
when you bat yo’ eyes?

you draw them in
with your satin on their sin

and make them weep
with your sighs

go on an’
hook their arms

with your clever little
charms

tell them stories
of your conquests

you’re a child of god
jus’ doin’ her daddy’s work

say it enough
you’ll start believin’

did your momma teach you that,
when she taught you how to pray ?

did your daddy praise you
when you bat yo’ eyes?

you draw them in
with your satin on their sin

and keep them close
with your lies

Rene ~ December 5, 2012

For 100 Word Song
This week’s prompt was  “Criminal” by Fiona Apple
I am way over 100 words
I’ve been a bad, bad girl.

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11 thoughts on “valley of the ashes

  1. excellentI like how the lies are a main character. It puts the other emotional triggers into perspective.very strong, rene, very friggin strong

  2. The repetition is ideal, adding strength to the words on either side. And your character analysis sheds light on the protagonist's inner self, as well as on the narrator's opinion of her. Always a pleasure to read your work, Rene.

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